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Month: July, 2014

A Story on Arrogance: Part 8

“She seems nice,” Donna’s father said as they watched Molly walk down the street with her mother.
“She is,” Donna replied.
“Has that boy been leaving you alone?” he asked.
Donna shrugged. “For the most part,” she replied.
“See,” her father said with a smile. “I told you he’d leave you alone if you just ignored him.”
Donna rolled her eyes. “Yeah, dad,” she replied. “I’m going to go play Mario.” She went down into the basement and began playing her game.
Her father frowned and followed her. After she had been playing for a little while, he spoke up. “What’s wrong, hunny?” he asked.
“Nothing,” Donna said, exasperated.
“That boy isn’t still picking on you, is he?” he asked.
“No,” Donna said. “He leaves me alone now.”
“Then what’s wrong?” her father asked. “Is someone else picking on you?”
“No one’s picking on me,” Donna growled.
“So ignoring him worked then?” he asked.
Donna rolled her eyes again. “Has it ever?” she asked.
Her father blinked, but said nothing.
Donna continued to play her game, hoping her father would leave her alone.
“Then…how did you get rid of him?” he said slowly.
Donna shrugged again. “I stood up for myself,” she said. “Molly says Jake is arrogant. He thinks he’s smarter and better than everyone, but he’s a coward. When I stood up for myself, he didn’t know what to do, so he went away.”
Her father had a look of surprise on his face. “You didn’t get into a fight, did you?” he asked with concern.
Donna looked at him. “Have you gotten called to the principal’s office?” she asked.
He shook his head slowly. Then he sighed and stood up. He watched Donna for a moment before turning to leave.

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Creating a Title

I’m trying to think of a new title for my book. The tentative one is weak and I need something that will peak people’s interests. One title that I’ve considered is “The Mercenary and the Mage.” Two others are “Twin Rogues” or “Rogue Sisters.” I also considered “The Renegade’s Authority.”
My book is about two sisters who escape from their home when intruders come to kill them and their family. They find safety, but then one runs off to become a mercenary. The other sister eventually becomes a mage.
I need some help. What do you think about these titles? How can they be improved? Why do you like or dislike them?

A Severe Lack of Motivation

Lately I have had no motivation to work on my book. I know that I should: I want to finish editing it so that it can eventually be published. But I can’t seem to bring myself to do any editing. How do you other writers out there motivate yourself when you are at your least motivated? How do you get yourselves to do the work that least interests you? I could really use a new strategy.

250 Followers

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A Story on Arrogance: Part 7

“Hi, Mr. Jameson,” Molly said. It was her first time over at Donna’s house.
“Well hello there,” Donna’s father said. “You must be Molly.”
Molly nodded.
Donna grinned. “Come on,” she said to Molly, “let’s go play on the trampoline.”
“Okay,” Molly agreed.
“Supper will be ready in about half an hour,” Donna’s father called after the girls.
Donna and Molly ran out the back door and through the yard. Molly beat Donna to the trampoline.
“Wanna play crack the egg?” Molly asked.
“How do you play?” Donna replied.
Molly thought for a moment. “Well, one person sits on the trampoline and they hold their feet,” she explained. “The other person jumps on the trampoline and tries to make the person let go to their feet. Once the person lets go, it’s the next persons turn.”
“Okay,” Donna said. “I’ll go first.” She sat down on the trampoline, folded her legs, and grabbed her feet. “Ready,” she said.
Molly began jumping up and down. It didn’t take her very long to get Donna to let go.
“My turn,” Molly cried. She dropped down into a cross-legged position and grabbed her feet. “Let’s go!” she yelled.
Donna giggled and began bouncing.
“Come on,” Molly cried. “You can do better than this.”
“I don’t want to get too close,” Donna replied.
“But that’s half the fun,” Molly said.
“What if I hurt you?” Donna asked.
Molly shrugged. “You can’t hurt me too bad,” she replied.
“Okay,” Donna said. She began jumping more vigorously. After a while, Donna finally got Molly to crack. She collapsed to the trampoline, panting. “That was a lot of work,” she said finally.
Molly giggled.
“Girls!” Donna’s dad called. “Supper!”
The girls climbed off the trampoline and ran back to the house.

The Mill River Recluse

I have just finished reading The Mill River Recluse by Darcie Chan. It was overall a very good story.
The book was about an old woman, Mary, who died. It began with her death, and how the town’s people wondered about the old woman who had died. It then went back in time to Mary’s early adulthood. The book bounced back and forth between the past and the present.
We learn a lot about Mary throughout the book. She had a sever anxiety disorder, which is why she was a recluse. She was never able to fully deal with her disorder, which prevented her from leading a full life. Her story is sad, but it is also fascinating. As someone with an anxiety disorder, I found her story to be a warning: never allow your fears to rule your life, fight against them to do what you want to lead a happy healthy life.
Mary’s only real friend was the town priest, Father O’Brien. He promised Mary’s grandfather-in-law that he would take care of Mary after her husband died. He obliged, but it turned out that Mary took care of him as much as she took care of her. Father O’Brien offered Mary companionship so that she would never be lonely. He also gave her the information that she needed to feel connected to the town. But Mary offered the priest a relationship that he could never get from his parishioners. To his parishioners, he is a leader. He is their moral compass. He feared letting them know that he was flawed because of what it may do to the people’s faith. Father O’Brien was a kleptomaniac who stole spoons. He had hundreds of spoons. Throughout the story, he finds himself fighting his weakness and, mostly, losing. At the end, though, he donates all the spoons to a soup kitchen.
Mary also befriends Daisy at the end of her life. That friendship only lasted a year, but it was a very important friendship in the end. Daisy is the town crazy lady. She is a very sweet woman who happens to believe in magic. She makes potions and sells them for a living. She isn’t able to work an actual job, so she receives benefits from the government. Sadly, Daisy had no friends in Mill River until Mary befriended her because she is seen as crazy.
The McAllister family, Mary’s husband’s family, abandoned Mary after her grandfather-in-law died. Conner, the grandfather-in-law, loved Mary and made sure that she would have everything that she would ever need before he died. He was the last McAllister to visit Mary. Patrick was Mary’s husband. He was the stereotypical entitled rich brat. He was not a good husband, but Mary loved him even after his death. Patrick’s parents blamed Mary for Patrick’s death even though it was caused by Patrick himself. Mary’s father was also in the beginning of the story. He raised horses, and died as a result of an accident with a horse.
The town’s people were the main focus of the story during the present. Kyle Hanson was by far my favorite character. Kyle was a police officer from Boston. He moved to Mill River after his wife died so that his daughter wouldn’t lose both parents. His daughter, Rowan, was a fourth grader. She is a very smart, happy child. The fourth grade teacher, Claudia, ends up dating Kyle. She is a very self-conscious woman who was over-weight for most of her life. She mover to Mill River after reaching her desired weight because she wanted a fresh start. She was initially afraid to trust Kyle because she didn’t think he’d love her if she knew about her weight issues. There was also the Fitzgerald’s, the police chief and his wife. They owned a bakery, which they, and the Hanson’s, lived above. Ron was another policeman, and his wife took care of Mary while she was dying. And finally, there was Leroy. He was also a police officer, but a bad one. He was rude, he sped, he drank to much, and he stalked Claudia. In the end, Leroy gets arrested for attempted murder.
My only real problem with the book was that it was confusing at first. It wasn’t always clear when you were bouncing back to the past. But it was so addicting that I couldn’t stop reading. I wanted to know what happened next. I got very invested in most of the characters. Mary, Father O’Brien, Claudia, and Kyle in particular. I would definitely recommend this book to anyone looking for a casual read. It’s full of drama, it’s suspenseful, and it’s thrilling.

The Mill River Recluse Review Update

I am almost finished reading The Mill River Recluse. I should be done it tomorrow. That means I’ll likely write the review for it tomorrow. I haven’t finished the second book yet, but I’m hoping to have it done the day after. So there should be a couple of reviews to read shortly. I will be taking a break from my story until I have them both done. Then I will be able to move on to the last book for review.
Right now, all I have to say about the book is if you think that stalking is the best way to attract a future partner, you have some serious issues. Well, that, and the book is really addicting. I’m loving it so far.

A Story On Arrogance: Part 6

“Ms. Ivy! Molly’s cheating,” Jake whined as he clasped his side.
“Quit whining Jake,” Ms. Ivy said. “I was watching the whole time. She hit you fair and square.”
“Did not,” Jake cried. “She was aiming for my head.”
“Jake!” Ms. Ivy cried. “Will you quit lying? You’re out. Now come sit beside Donna.”
“It’s not fair,” Jake grumbled as he stomped towards the bench.
“You know,” Donna said as Jake slumped down on the bench, “just because you whine a lot doesn’t make you right.”
“Shut up, fatty,” Jake replied.
“Jake, Donna, be nice,” Ms. Ivy said.
Jake stuck his tongue out at Donna. Donna smirked at him.
“Okay kids,” Ms. Ivy said. “Molly won this round. Let’s start again.”
“Can’t we play a different game?” Jake asked.
“I thought you said you liked dodge ball,” Molly replied mockingly.
“Not when someone keeps cheating,” Jake shot back.
“Molly, be nice,” Ms. Ivy scolded. “Jake, quite being a poor sport.”
Jake scowled and stomped out into the middle of the gym.
Molly and Donna rolled their eyes and smiled.

Visiting Family

I have been visiting family since Wednesday. Today was my cousins birthday. He turned 8. So far I have been shot with nerf guns, I’ve been harassed about having babies (I’m not even married yet, guys), and I’ve been asked multiple times if I’m “done my story yet” (never!).
It has been nice to visit my family. I only tend to get the chance to see them once a year. I spend more time with my partner’s family because we live close to them. My family is a 9 hour drive away. Because we spend more time with his family, I tend to be the obvious introvert. We’re both introverts, but it’s his family, so it doesn’t tend to show. But his introverted nature has been showing while we’re here. More than a few times, he’s disappeared. I understand his feelings, and my family is full of many loud people, but it’s hard to split my time between him and my family when he wanders off.
But tomorrow we’ll have most of the day alone. One of my cousins will be racing in a dirt bike competition, and most of my family will be there. My partner and I have opted to go to the beach instead. I think some alone time is in order. We’ll have more time for my family later.
Though I’ve had little time for writing and only slightly more time for reading since I arrived here. I doubt I’ll be able to catch up on my reading and writing tomorrow. That’ll probably have to wait until I get home.

A Story On Arrogance: Part 5

“Hey, Donna,” Jake said mockingly. “Where’s your body guard.”
“Go away, Jake,” Donna replied. It was only lunch time and Jake was already back to harassing her.
“First tell me where Molly is,” Jake said.
“Why?” Donna asked.
“I wanna know,” Jake whined.
“You want to know if she’ll be here anytime soon so you know if you can harass me,” Donna said calmly.
“Shut up,” Jake said. “You think you’re so much smarter than everybody, don’t you?”
Donna shook her head. “I think you’re thinking about yourself,” she said.
“What do you know?” Jake said. He stormed away.
“What did he want now?” Molly asked as she came up behind Donna.
Donna shrugged. “To know if he could get away with bullying me when you weren’t here,” she said.
Molly rolled her eyes. “Figures,” she said. “You seemed to handle it well, though.”
Donna smiled. “It wasn’t hard,” she said. “He’s still mad that I did better than him, though.”
“I told you: he’s arrogant,” Molly replied. “He thinks he’s better than everyone, and he always assumes fowl play when he’s proven wrong.”

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